Please review my review-less fic!

Fandom: Discworld
Characters: The Librarian and Hex
Genre: Humor
Rating: K+ (PG)


So what's the verdict?

To be brutal:

In my opinion, there's waaay too much dialogue. Like, the entire fic is dialogue (although I appreciate it's a short story). You also repeat the word "said" twice in the first two lines.

Also, I don't get the joke.

There's a commercial that's on right now, I think it's for Robitussin. It features an orangutan using the online Symptom Finder to look up the right remedy. And all I could think, the first time I saw it, was "The Librarian is consulting Hex." It just struck me funny.