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| Subject: Looking For Trouble Thu Jun 11, 2009 2:10 pm | |
| There are few times in my life that I have felt superior to a published author, seeing as how I am still collecting rejection notices published now bitches! One of those times was reading this book. Oh, this. book. Looking for Trouble: the Erotic Fiction of R. J. March. I got it on mark-down for $5. I cannot argue for the price, since I did get some laughs. For all that it is supposed to be gay erotica, I cannot shake the feeling that March is actually anti-gay and wrote this to ensure no man who ever read it would want to have sex again. On the cover is two men in the back seat of a car, both fully dressed but clearly Up To Something. This may be the best part of the book. It is a collection of twenty-seven short stories. The squick begins with the introduction. The first line, even. - Quote :
- My father was my first erotic fiction.
Spoilered for really terrible porn. You were warned. - Spoiler:
This is not one of the stories, friends. This is the author speaking of himself. The way he goes on to describe his father physically is much more suitable in a story of a fictional character than a man describing a close relative. I did not need to know that he rarely wore underwear. I certainly did not need to read: - Quote :
- I went in there when he was asleep to look at him facedown… [snip] see clearly the hair-choked split of his ass, the huge twin orbs of his testicles, the wrinkles of his sack pressed out and about ready to burst.
Now his father knew why the hooker had been ‘on discount.’ The author then goes on to talk about other people he wanted in his childhood, ending with a snide - Quote :
- But not Ralph; I never wanted Ralph.
Oh, yeah! Well, I never liked you anyway! But on to the first short story, Looking for Trouble. It begins with a man, Ron, who had worked at a detention center for boys. He is visited by one of the boys who had previously been under his care, Matt. - Quote :
- …manipulating the big, good-looking boy by his dick strings.
Next on When Body Mods Go Too Far... - Quote :
- Fully extended, Matt’s cock now resembled a fat, blunt redheaded cannon,
He shot himself with it in an attempt to escape the badfic, but misfired. - Quote :
- …his pecker thwacked against his stomach.
Pecker. Potentially one of the least sexy words in the English language. Sadly, he never uses tallywhacker, then at least I’d know he was trying to make me laugh. - Quote :
- He pushed Matt down on the bed and grabbed his ankles, splitting him like a wishbone.
Matt screamed and called 911. Ron, as it turned out, was a serial splitter. - Quote :
- Putting his face into that dark, musty split…
Did I mention that most parts of a man (crotch, crack, etc) are often described as ‘musty?’ Musty is not an adjective I associate with good sex. Or good hygiene, for that matter. - Quote :
- Ron pulled on Matt’s dick, making it greasy.
He realized a moment later that he was actually assaulting an oil pump. - Quote :
- Matt’s bung hole pulsed. Ron ran his thumb over it, pushing into it as if it were a hot, overripe melon.
Matt exploded into fruit flavors three seconds later. It seemed the next time Ron made a golem for his own amusement, he would need to construct it from something other than pre-chewed Juicy Fruit. PROTIP: Lube is your friend. - Quote :
- Matt’s heavy joint trembled and dripped with anticipation.
He soon realized, however, that his knee perhaps ought not be doing that when the shooting pains began. - Quote :
- A slow, easy fuck to introduce the boy’s anus to Ron’s big invader was in order.
It was discovered that no matter how hard they tried, an entire Viking would not fit. - Quote :
- …burst up inside Matt’s cunt, churning up a come butter that the boy would eventually eat off Ron’s resuscitating dick.
Try our new low calorie Santorum butter. Guaranteed to help you lose weight because you will never want to eat again! YOU NEVER GO ASS TO MOUTH!
And now for replies from the old board because they made me laugh: - Spoiler:
- Rabid Badger wrote:
- You know-they used to sell books exactly like this (complete with non-existent plotlines to get the two characters together AND ass to mouth sex) 3 for $5.88 at the Adult Bookstore in Iowa City. Now they're selling them for three times that much on Amazon and calling them 'erotica.'
Why can't people just admit they buy this kind've stuff to whack off to? You can try and dress it up with a plot and make it somehow deep and meaningful, but 99% of it is jerk-off material.
I will admit, however, that this made me LOL:
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- A slow, easy fuck to introduce the boy’s anus to Ron’s big invader was in order.
It was discovered that no matter how hard they tried, an entire Viking would not fit.
- Darth_Toxic wrote:
- That's some hilariously bad writing.
- Stupid, Terrible Stroke Story wrote:
- Matt’s bung hole pulsed. Ron ran his thumb over it, pushing into it as if it were a hot, overripe melon.
I've gotta disagree about 'pecker', man. "Bung Hole" is by far the least sexy anatomical term out there. After I read that paragraph, I couldn't shake the image of Beavis and Butt-Head watching this story on TV and chuckling endlessly at it.
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- …burst up inside Matt’s cunt, churning up a come butter that the boy would eventually eat off Ron’s resuscitating dick.
If Matt has a cunt, then I don't think he's a he. Just FYI, Ron. - Malganis wrote:
- Great snark, Rae.
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- My father was my first erotic fiction. ...I went in there when he was asleep to look at him facedown… [snip] see clearly the hair-choked split of his ass, the huge twin orbs of his testicles, the wrinkles of his sack pressed out and about ready to burst.
This is a guy fantasizing about his father's apparently explosive testicles? Just... wow. I mean, of all adjectives, describing a guy's scrotum as 'ready to burst' is just... not sexy. More like a medical emergency waiting to happen.
And wouldn't having a 'hair-choked' ass lead to some potential hygiene problems? The only thing that could make this description worse is if the page had a Scratch 'n' Sniff section....
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- …burst up inside Matt’s cunt, churning up a come butter that the boy would eventually eat off Ron’s resuscitating dick.
:vomit:
And I believe that the 'cunt' in there is a reference to the term 'boycunt', which I've heard about. - Fairlight wrote:
- rae wrote:
- There are few times in my life that I have felt superior to a published author, seeing as how I am still collecting rejection notices. One of those times was reading this book.
Well, if it didn't make you feel superior, there wouldn't be much hope for your writing. Thank you for sharing it, it was a good laugh.
- Rabid Badger wrote:
- You know-they used to sell books exactly like this (complete with non-existent plotlines to get the two characters together AND ass to mouth sex) 3 for $5.88 at the Adult Bookstore in Iowa City. Now they're selling them for three times that much on Amazon and calling them 'erotica.'
How pointless when you could just go to a slash site and get it for free. Though I kind of want to write a proper book of gay porn now. - DeeDee wrote:
- Fairlight wrote:
How pointless when you could just go to a slash site and get it for free. Though I kind of want to write a proper book of gay porn now. Slash fic has the advantage in that a lot of it is better than this (though, that isn't saying a whole lot, considering how bad this is). - rae wrote:
- Rabid Badger wrote:
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- A slow, easy fuck to introduce the boy’s anus to Ron’s big invader was in order.
It was discovered that no matter how hard they tried, an entire Viking would not fit.
I now have totally unwanted mental images of someone trying to stuff The Mighty Thor up some guy's bunghole. Thanks bunches, Rae. :affraid: You should know, you weren't the only one with that same train of thought. Invader > OHHAI Vikings > OHGODTHOR!
And thank you, thank you, Mal! And he talks about his uncle, too, just not as explicitly. Which given what a detailed view he had of his father (and presumably himself), I am amazed at how often he mistakes an asshole for a cunt. And calls men's nipples their tits. You'd think he would have figured this out one of the times he had sex... except I'm reasonably certain this man has never actually gotten laid.
I may do some of the others. I seem to recall there being much worse in the other stories. :D - Rabid Badger wrote:
- DeeDee wrote:
- Fairlight wrote:
How pointless when you could just go to a slash site and get it for free. Though I kind of want to write a proper book of gay porn now. Slash fic has the advantage in that a lot of it is better than this (though, that isn't saying a whole lot, considering how bad this is). Actually, most of the slash fanfic I've read wasn't anywhere near this bad. But then, I tend to steer clear of anything that involves the author reminiscing about the good ol' days with Da and his Uncle. I figure if the author can't tell an asshole from a cunt, he's either lying about his sexual orientation, or he's got some very real issues as far as his own sexuality is concerned.
This is actually a lot more akin to the kind of stuff you find at the Nifty Archives. At least as far as horrific writing, actual names of body parts fail. and the strong feeling that, despite the fact the authors are gay, they've never actually had sex with another man in their life. - gaijinguy wrote:
- Is anyone else wondering if this was written by Babelfish? It does have the "invisible insane" sort of feel to it.
- rae wrote:
- gaijinguy wrote:
- Is anyone else wondering if this was written by Babelfish? It does have the "invisible insane" sort of feel to it.
Naw, because he manages entire short stories with nothing more than an unhealthy obsession with yellowing boxer briefs to make someone go WTF.
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Solitia
Join date : 2009-06-10 Age : 45 Location : Columbus, Ohio
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